Jasmine Hart

I liked this. The first stanza is very good and I like the whole "backspace" thing, but I'd get rid of the last line here as it's too colloquial and ...

This is cute. I'd make the first letter capital, and add a comma after "popular." I'd chaneg "to" to "by" as I think it sounds better. I'd add a comma ...

I agree with what's been said already. You handled the rhyming very well, but, honestly, I think it took from your piece as a whole as you were restricted by ...

I liked this. You expressed yourself beautifully. Firstly,"tale" should be "tales." I'd omit "those" before "cliches" as I think it makes the line too long. I'd also change "heart goes" ...

I really like this Kit. Actually, strike that, like isn't strong enough, I love it. Overall, I think the second version is better, but I'd leave in teh part about ...

Ok, the first thing I'd suggest is to arrange this like a poem so it's not just a block of text, as it will make it easier for your readers. ...

Your imagery was very good, and your rhyming was handled well. I'd add full stops to the end of your stanzas.I think that your rhythm was a little off. Maybe ...

I like the idea here, and your tone is perfect, but I think it needs a little tweaking. The first two lines were great, but I think the rhyme of ...

This was great gadi. The only thing that kind of jarred for me was when you twisted the syntax of "I'll have lovers plenty." Think it would sound more natural ...

Hey, these are great. You've really mastered the form. I'm not sure about the last line of "Ink." I think it could be more powerful. The last two were my ...

I agree with what's been said already. I especially love; "Of the eight tiny spiders you swallow in your Lifetime." That was really fresh and powerful. I also like how ...

Lol. This is really great. The form was perfect, and this is just pure brilliance. I wish I could say something a bit more helpful but I really can't fault ...

I really liked this! Your imagery is great, and I love how it flows. I love the second last line, and the first half of the last line, but I'm ...

I do like this, but agree with blackstorm and Fangala. The imagery is lovely, and you've expressed yourself well. I might suggest tweaking the third line by just admitting the ...

This was really great, and the flow was fantastic. The rhyming scheme is handled really well throughout, and made it very easy to read. I think I'd change the second ...